Shop Mobile More Submit  Join Login


The best thing in the world,
For every boy and girl.

It makes you feel giddy;
It makes you feel pity.

This thing is able to make you free,
Pushing the point of insanity.

Rising to clouds in the air
Or falling far into dispair

It's indescribable
And irresistable.

It can make you fly;
It can make you die.

What is this thing you ask?
What's capable of such tasks?

As beautiful as a dove.
Yet ugly, it is love.
How do describe a feeling? Here's an attempt.
Add a Comment:
 
:iconsar10628:
Sar10628 Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2005   Digital Artist
I really like this poem... I like the concept of it.
my suggestion for you is to flesh it out more... describe the feeling more than just saying what it feels like.
like the part where you say it is beautiful as a dove... in what ways are they similar?
thats my :twocents:
great job!
Reply
:iconwarriorpoet:
WarriorPoet Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2005
The very simplistic structure of this one implies the sheer complexity of life. For we always think its simple for the surface. Well writen for so few words. Gets the point across so well.

D-Chan
Reply
:iconhonnelore:
honnelore Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2005
Thank you! :)
Reply
:iconbaikahl:
baikahl Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2005   Photographer
so true :(
Reply
:iconhonnelore:
honnelore Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2005
Thanks for the comment.
Reply
:iconcklaighe:
Cklaighe Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2005  Professional Digital Artist
It makes you feel pity.


Oh my.... as in pity myself...

god.... love can kill you true!!!
Reply
:iconhonnelore:
honnelore Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2005
Thanks for the comment.
Reply
:iconzake:
ZaKe Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2005  Hobbyist Digital Artist
beautifull, both the preview and the poem :) great work on describing love, both sides of it :)
Reply
:iconhonnelore:
honnelore Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2005
Thanks so much!!! :D
Reply
:iconnunodc:
nunodc Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2005   Photographer
Very nice, i like it how you explore both sides of it.. i also like the structure, one sentence used to describe each side, at a time...
Really, really nice!.. and great picture!..
Reply
:iconhonnelore:
honnelore Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2005
Thanks so much!
Reply
:iconhonnelore:
honnelore Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2005
Thanks so much!
Reply
:iconcomprimido:
comprimido Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2005
Its great and very cleverly shows both sides of it too :) I love the pic that goes with it aswell!
Reply
:iconhonnelore:
honnelore Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2005
Thanks! :)
Reply
:iconp-38:
P-38 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2005   Photographer
Your description is quite accurate lol and the picture goes along with it as well. Something good...yet painful? Nice
Reply
:iconhonnelore:
honnelore Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2005
Thank you! :D
Reply
:iconbabykelly:
babykelly Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2004
wow. truthful and still beatiful
Reply
:iconhonnelore:
honnelore Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2004
well, thank you! :)
Reply
:iconarthman:
arthman Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2004
A nice and accurate description of what love is. I may start writing a rebuttal to this one, though. Although, I don't know how you can rebut (if that is the verb form of the noun) an argument that includes both sides of it. I guess I may emphasize the ugly more than the beautiful...that's about the only avenue you've left me.

Arthman
Reply
:iconhonnelore:
honnelore Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2004
Try your best, bud. :)
Reply
:iconemalee06:
Emalee06 Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2004   Writer
Love is a many splinded thing. Love lifts you up where you belong. All you need is love.
Reply
:iconhonnelore:
honnelore Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2004
Can be sad, but very true.
Reply
:iconsatine1314:
satine1314 Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2004  Student Writer
The feeling you desribed is so true.
Reply
:iconhonnelore:
honnelore Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2004
It tried, love has been awful to me as of late, so it wasn't too difficult to think of the words.
Reply
:iconsatine1314:
satine1314 Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2004  Student Writer
I'm sorry love has been bad for you lately but most likely things will change. Never give up on love. As you can tell I'm one of those people who believe love is a big part in your life.
Reply
:iconhonnelore:
honnelore Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2004
Very true. Love is a neccessity no matter how much one refuses it.
Reply
:iconbeautifulkitten:
Beautifulkitten Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2004   Digital Artist
Bravo! I think thats a very good description!
Reply
:iconhonnelore:
honnelore Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2004
Thank you!
Reply
:iconbeautifulkitten:
Beautifulkitten Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2004   Digital Artist
ur welcome. I'll have some love poems hopefully submitted soon.
Reply
:iconhonnelore:
honnelore Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2004
I'd love to read 'em.
Reply
:icondarkestlove:
DarkestLove Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2004
very nice...:) i like how you have both sides of love init...the good and the bad :D
Reply
:iconhonnelore:
honnelore Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2004
Thanks, it is a great feeling, but it is awful too.
Reply
:icondarkestlove:
DarkestLove Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2004
yep that is very true.......well done :) for a great piece of work
Reply
Add a Comment:
 
×

:iconhonnelore: More from honnelore


More from DeviantArt



Details

Submitted on
November 29, 2004
File Size
630 bytes
Link
Thumb

Stats

Views
113
Favourites
0
Comments
35
×